Monday, 26 September 2011

Through the tunnel.

Setting
  • Time: Summer time.
  • place: At the beach.
The plot

It was during the holiday when Jerry and his mother went for the holiday. Every morning Jerry and his mother use to go to the beach. At the beach Jerry use to swim while his mother use to be under umbrella looked at his son. One day on the edge of a small cape Jerry find same boys who were running, naked, down to the rocks. The language that the were speaking he did not uderstand them but later they became friends.Jerry was a good swimmer all the boys were looking at him when he is diving. the bad moment for Jerry was when the boys swam back to the shore without look at him while hi was diving. He cried openly there was no one to see him, and he cried himself out. One day when hi was swimming he had found the hole and he tried to push himself in and it was difficult for him, first he thought , he must learn to control his  breathing. Jerry keep on exercised his lungs but every time hi exercise hi use to bled from the nose at night. He almost gave up. He thought  would return to the house and lie down, and mybe next summer, when he  had another years grouth in him then he would go throuh the hole. Jerry still keep on he put on his goggles and later get through the tunnel.

The main charater
Jerry
The main character is Jerry he was the young english boy. He was eleven years old and his mother was a widow. Jerry was a foreigner strayed from his own beach. He was a friendlly boy and a good swimmer. Jerry can stay under water for two minuts three minut.

4 comments:

  1. I like your style of writing, but as a LPB student, I would like to advice you to check on your tenses. If you decide to use past tense, stick to it.

    Welldone with the post, I still have not done mine.

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  3. few spelling mistakes. 6/10

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